You do have a lot of errors in this, and desperately need a beta. Personally, I don\'t think Draco works as a girl, and you haven\'t done enough with Hermione and Severus to make it worth \"inverting\" them. Also, you don\'t throw up from pregnancy one day after having sex. In fact you can\'t tell if you\'re pregnant usually for a couple of weeks. I think from reading this you might be very young, perhaps you should stick to writing more about what you know, rather than trying to write adult scenes.